Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).
Through the course of taking English composition, I have improved a lot on my revision process. To be more specific I have improved on my global revision looking at the big picture of my writing rather than just writing papers with no thought behind it. While in high school I viewed the revision process as just looking over the sentence structure and only did local revision. As I progressed in English Composition I stopped worrying about the local revision and focused on the global revision being able to see the big picture. The revision process of writing is important because when you take time away from your paper your able to look at new perspectives and gain new knowledge as you go back and revise you are able to add more details to your writing. While revising you may, realize that some of your claims can be combined with others source other times you realize the structure of your writing doesn’t have a nice flow but as you shift some of the paragraphs around the essay begins to have a consistent flow. You are able to apply different way to have global revision being able to look over the big picture and working on sentence level editing being local revision. Done below are examples of ways I would revise my essays for English.
In the paragraph before revising, I lacked details in the highlighted sentence which was pointed out during peer review. I was suggested to expand on what I meant by Protect ourselves and how that relates to our emotions. this would contribute to m global revision in addition to local revision with a few sentence level errors that can be corrected in the paragraph as well.
After revising my paper, I had gone back to the highlighted sentence and decide to explain on how negative memories protect us in life since they allow for us to make future decisions being almost like a case and effect relationship. I also decided to expand more in the essay adding in an example that could be related to a negative memory that cause you to learn from in the highlighted sections I used burning your hand on a stove for example. You can also see in the highlighted sections that local revision also occurred fixing simple sentence level errors however some are still present allowing for more revision to occur.
In this sample I had placed a quote from my second source in my introduction paragraph, but I lacked actually introducing the author for the quote I was citing. In the dark highlighted section, you can see the quote and a simple sentence that slightly connects the two sources however I gave an uneven amount of explanation for my first source compared to the second source. This was noticeable during peer review and was called to my attention to make sure to fully introduce the author and the source before placing a quote.
After going back and revising my paragraph I tried to introduce Ross Gay more clearly and explore the meaning of Inciting Joy Comparing the two samples your able to see from the highlighted section how much I expanded on the idea and on Ross Gay’s work and his connection between sorrow and Joy.
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